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[bookaddict43]

Anyone out there tonight/today?

If you are - welcome! It's time to start writing! Let's write for an hour and then meet to discuss our work or lack thereof :D

Don't forget to track the comments so you can see what's happening....

*flexs fingers*

Comments

[wildannuette.livejournal.com]

I have no muse today but I'm here to aid the discussion :)

[truthmaker]

I'm here, though I'm not sure what (if anything) I'll get written.

[bookaddict43.livejournal.com]

I'm back and I had a visitor, but I did get a tiny bit written. How did everyone else go?

[truthmaker]

Got the next part of my Jaylee series written. It's a bit shorter than the previous parts. But it wasn't supposed to ever been that long. I can throw it up here if you want to read it.

[bookaddict43.livejournal.com]

Sure that'd be great! I've been waiting for the rest of your series...

[truthmaker]

Here's what I wrote:
Series (my Jaylee thing)
Catch Him

There were large parts of that day he still didn’t remember. There was the part he was unconscious of course but even after that, one he had come to there were gaps. He vaguely remembered a conversation with the Doc, something about his spine and being safe though the details were lost to him now. That moon brained sister of his had shown up at some point and threatened to mind him, he wasn’t really sure what to make of that. After that there was nothing for several hours, he had most likely lost consciousness again. He really was not overly concerned about the loss though, it would not be the first nor probably the last time there were gaps in his memory.

He sought out Zoe that night after dinner to fill him in on what he missed. Turned out to be about what he had come to expect from one of Mal’s plans. Saffron had beaten them to the punch on the double-cross and gotten there first. That woman had managed to not only disable Serenity, again, but had abandoned Mal, naked as the day he was born, out in the middle of nowhere. Luckily Saffron hadn’t thought to wipe the guidance computer on the shuttle or they probably would still have been looking for their captain. That just left him with one loose end to tie up.

“So,” Jayne queried, “what happened to me? The last thing I remember I was puttin’ the part back in and the ‘verse gone black.”

“You got hit…” Replied Zoe.

“By electricity…” Added Wash.

“By an electric discharge,” continued Zoe shooting her husband a look for interrupting, “by one of the parts on the container. You were lucky, if you hadn’t been tied down you’d a fallen into the ocean below us. And I doubt even you, Jayne, coulda survived that.” She said the last part with a smile, but the humor did not lessen the realization of how close he had come to dying today.

“So how did I get back inside, being all dead to the ‘verse an’ all?” Jayne asked, honestly curious as to how they had solved the problem of his, well, bulk.

“Kaylee pulled you in.” Zoe answered, “I’m not sure how she managed, but by the time I’d got to the hatch she was, uh, lowerin’ you back inside the ship.”

Jayne was incredulous, “Li’ll Kaylee manhandled my ass?”

“You better believe it Jayne. Weren’t for her you’d still be swingin’ from the top of the ship.”

Wash’s comment of, “I’ve always thought that, properly motivated, that girl could move mountains to get what she wanted,” had pretty much ended the discussion. It gave Jayne much to think about.

As he lay in bed that night chasing sleep he contemplated the day. In many ways he was lucky, for him certainly it could have been much worse. Jayne had a good idea of what electricity could do to a body. He knew, that a few hours out of it was getting off quite lucky. In the end it was thinking of Kaylee that finally allowed sleep to overtake him. He was safe. She was there, to catch him when he fell.

[bookaddict43.livejournal.com]

I like it! I've always wondered what happened after Jayne fell and later after Simon threatens him :)

That moon brained sister of his had shown up at some point and threatened to mind him

The only line I'm not sure about - could you say

That moon brained sister of his had shown up and threatened to kill him with her brain?

[truthmaker]

How about.

that moon brained sister of his had shown up at some point and threatened to brain him

I'm kinda, sorta trying to imply that he didn't quite remember that she had threatened to kill him. He remembered she was there, and had threatened him in some way, but he couldn't remember the details.

[bookaddict43.livejournal.com]

That sounds good. I like the haziness of Jayne's memories here.