Sparks

[bookaddict43]

Title: Sparks
Author: Bookaddict
Characters: River
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: Firefly and all it’s characters are the property of Joss Whedon.
Word count: 100
Comment: What was River thinking while standing on the pyre in Safe? Written for firefly100, prompt: burn

They would burn and the sparks would fly gently upwards and they would be free. Free of her less than sane behaviour, free of his guilt and unhappiness, free of care and free of spirit. They could be as children again in the wind, swirling along whichever path they so chose.

But they would be free also of burgeoning friendships, learning, family, laughter and fun; free of the future and all its myriad possibilities. Their boat to the stars would fly without them and be incomplete.

The breeze told her no and their freedom arrived. “Time to go,” River said.

Comments

[majestamoniet.livejournal.com]

Simply beauitful. That really is something I'd imagine River thinking about. I'm a believer that River sounds alot more sane in her head than she does aloud, and I think you captured that. Well done.

[brithistorian.livejournal.com]

This was really interesting - you've managed to pack quite a lot into a small package here. Each time I re-read it I'm more impressed. :-D

[cmk418]

I love that River is completely aware of the pros and cons of what the fire and the freedom of death offers. Very well done.

PS - Maybe you could do another from Simon's POV?

[danniisupernova.livejournal.com]

I love the way she thinks of death, how she's not afraid.

[elsibet34.livejournal.com]

Gorgeously written. :D

[xfirefly9x.livejournal.com]

Very simple, yet so beautiful. I love it!!

[bookaddict43.livejournal.com]

Thank you :) I really believe after her conversation with Simon about finding her 'broken' River wouldn't mind an ending to their troubles. I'm so glad you think I captured her thought processes.

[bookaddict43.livejournal.com]

You read it more than once? *bounces* Thank you, you made my night :D

[bookaddict43.livejournal.com]

I could see River considering the freedom of death quite seriously, poor thing. Thanks for thinking I captured that.

I hadn't thought about this scene from Simon's side *ponders*. Now it's the redux maybe I can manage it :)

[bookaddict43.livejournal.com]

I think the poor thing has seen worse things than death and would probably see it as some kind of release.

[bookaddict43.livejournal.com]

Thank you :D

[bookaddict43.livejournal.com]

Thanks so much, I really appreciate the comment :)

[brithistorian.livejournal.com]

Shiny! To me, a well-written drabble (which this was) is like a people - it's so information-dense that I have to read it several times to feel like I fully understand it.

[b-cs.livejournal.com]

Wow, she had phrases that made some sense and then she goes off swirling in the wind... Well done!

(meaning that you captured River's mental confusion very nicely, not that your sentences didn't make sense)

[bookaddict43.livejournal.com]

*grins* Thank you :)